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    September 15

    再意识流一把

             实在感动地五体投地,小女子之处女Blog竟有如此众多滴XDJM们前来“踩一脚”,怎么着也要坚持不懈把这片土灌溉得肥肥沃沃,好让大家踩起来弹力十足,开开心心~~
     
             “赵老师”说我的文章简直是意识流,大概随性惯了,别再给我套上“中心思想”的紧箍咒吧,这里是free space...FREE,好像除了“免费“,也有“自由”之意吧~~~“赵老师”,我又要意识流一把了。
     
              话说那天清晨,为给家里做饭的阿姨送点东东,起了个大早。就这个充满小市民气息的普通“上海早晨”,让刚搬至新家、小资情结浓重又不太早起的我记忆犹新,倍感亲切起来。
     
              馒头小摊儿蒸汽缭绕,年轻小贩使劲儿冲我挤眉弄眼,似乎嚷着“怎么,路过也别错过啊”?暗笑,好像我不吃早饭已多年,赶路先吧~~上海的自行车族们实在闻名遐迩,无论我家门前这条狭路如何鱼龙混杂,他们依旧能各显神通,以迅雷之势嗖嗖从我身边滑过~~东家阿婆西家阿姨奔走相告着“今朝***小菜新鲜,便宜,侬买了伐”~~东浜路又修了,压路机霸气占着半边马路轰鸣作响~~一揣着绿色大邮包的绿衣人差点与我撞了个满怀,瞧压路机把这路给占的,让人家绿衣天使的飞信传书又慢了半拍~~一路晃悠,阿姨的东东也交付完毕了。
             回到家楼下,那辆黑桑(我家楼道门口的标志性物体,一黑色桑塔纳)噗哧噗哧发着抖,男tx在车里显然不耐烦地翻着早报,心想我家领导哪能还没打扮好?我边上楼边盘算,这还未谋面的黑桑领导究竟是何方妖女,一浓妆艳抹黑裙裹身却有着男人婆之face和短发的精明上海女迎面而下,钻进了黑桑。Sign,一定又是一个标准气管炎......想来还是我贴隔壁的帅锅美女家庭让我养眼万分。
     
               越写越觉小市民,越写越觉得压根非意识流,而改流水帐了。其实,世界未尝不是由大多数平凡人们构建成?谁家免得了开门七件事?谁能离开朴实真切的亲情、爱情和友情?生活未尝不是在平凡中显出真味......写给小资如我,虚荣如我的MM们共勉~~~~

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    不知我舞 wrote:
    写的真好,不知不觉我的键盘就湿了...匿了-_P
    看来JJ偶尔过一匣子小市民的生活,有种回到群众队伍的好精神!
    遇到这般好文,何止踩上一脚啊?
    “一百遍呀,一百遍!”
    Oct. 11
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    旷漠孤鹰 wrote:
    我也来捧场.呼...
    Sept. 23
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    哥哥的前半生 wrote:
    文章不错,写文章的更不错,呵呵,很有见地.
    Sept. 21
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    JOHNNY wrote:
    哈哈,那天看了意识流一把的时候就打算写一些感想,可忙到忘记了。今天打开一看,乖乖不得了,洋洋洒洒一大段评论。仔细看完后发现把我想说得都说了,把我没想到的也说了个彻底,佩服。之余,搜肠刮肚添加两点,权当附庸风雅:1.“馒头小摊儿蒸汽缭绕,年轻小贩使劲儿冲我挤眉弄眼,似乎嚷着“怎么,路过也别错过啊”?--除了作者想暗示点什么和不是人话之外,似乎现在这个年代也没小贩为了销售他们的点心大叫“走过路过不要错过”之类的话。过了,稍嫌浮夸。2. 上海的自行车确实是多,应该说全中国的自行车在全世界是闻名遐迩,但在中国以自行车闻名遐迩的城市首推天津。当然啦,这是技术上的错误,不是文笔上的过失,非作者之过也。
    Sept. 20
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    GarrettZhao wrote:
    您的一篇文章面世,立刻激起千层浪,不同凡响阿,评论比原著都长了!
    Sept. 16
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    GarrettZhao wrote:
    我这不是想多给您添砖加瓦嘛
    Sept. 16
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    天秤座的陆陆 wrote:
    赵老师忒13
    Sept. 16
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    Amy_mjm1 wrote:
    赵,Garret,表变来变去啦,整得好像中美混血似的,呵呵。着实佩服你的咬文嚼字,嘻嘻,看来在私塾里呆的时间不短,是不是老先生老打你手心儿,所以养成强迫症----直到把这文字给“嚼碎了”才心满意足,大呼爽爽爽阿?
    Sept. 16
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    GarrettZhao wrote:
    越写越觉小市民,越写越觉得压根非意识流,而改流水帐了。其实,世界未尝不是由大多数平凡人们构建成?谁家免得了开门七件事?谁能离开朴实真切的亲情、爱情和友情?生活未尝不是在平凡中显出真味......写给小资如我,虚荣如我的MM们共勉~~~~
    终于还是自己套上了“中心思想”的紧箍咒吧?
    Sept. 16
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    GarrettZhao wrote:
    回到家楼下,那辆黑桑(我家楼道门口的标志性物体,一黑色桑塔纳)噗哧噗哧发着抖,(描写的出色)男tx在车里显然不耐烦地翻着早报,心想我家领导哪能还没打扮好?我边上楼边盘算,这还未谋面的黑桑领导究竟是何方妖女,一浓妆艳抹黑裙裹身却有着男人婆之face和短发的精明上海女(其实是超级女生)迎面而下,钻进了黑桑。Sign,一定又是一个标准气管炎......想来还是我贴隔壁的帅锅美女家庭让我养眼万分(您又生出啥想法了,可别破坏人家家庭)。
    Sept. 16
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    GarrettZhao wrote:
    一揣着绿色大邮包的绿衣人差点与我撞了个满怀,瞧压路机把这路给占的,让人家绿衣天使的飞信传书又慢了半拍(明明是因为毛阿婆)~~一路晃悠(形象,坦白的说出了毛阿婆的走路特色),阿姨的东东也交付完毕了。
    Sept. 16
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    GarrettZhao wrote:
    东家阿婆西家阿姨奔走相告着“今朝***小菜新鲜,便宜,侬买了伐”~~东浜路又修了,压路机霸气占着半边马路轰鸣作响~~
    (“东浜路“这句话是东家阿婆说的还是毛阿婆说的??)
    Sept. 16
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    GarrettZhao wrote:
    上海的自行车族们实在闻名遐迩,无论我家门前这条狭路如何鱼龙混杂,他们依旧能各显神通,以迅雷(不及掩耳盗铃)之势嗖嗖从我身边滑过
    Sept. 16
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    GarrettZhao wrote:
    馒头小摊儿蒸汽缭绕,年轻小贩使劲儿冲我挤眉弄眼,似乎嚷着“怎么,路过也别错过啊”?
    (“年轻小贩使劲儿冲我挤眉弄眼“-------作者又在很明显的暗示着什么),(“怎么,路过也别错过啊”?-----不是人话)
    Sept. 16
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    GarrettZhao wrote:
    话说那天清晨,为给家里做饭的阿姨送点东东,起了个大早。就这个充满小市民气息的普通“上海早晨”,让刚搬至新家、小资情结浓重又不太早起的我记忆犹新,倍感亲切起来。
    (本段没有可怕的缺陷,作者的水平得到了奇怪的升华)
    Sept. 16
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    赵老师 wrote:
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    “赵老师”说我的文章简直是意识流,大概随性惯了,别再给我套上“中心思想”的紧箍咒吧,这里是free space...FREE,好像除了“免费“,也有“自由”之意吧~~~“赵老师”,我又要意识流一把了。
    (意识流者,流的是“意识“,不是流其他的,所以以后如果再要“流一把“,不用通知老师,想上就上,已经不是小学生了)
    Sept. 16
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    赵老师 wrote:
    分段点评开始:1
    实在感动地五体投地,(这种开头让赵老师佩服的五体投地,前言不搭后语)小女子之处女Blog竟有如此众多滴XDJM们前来“踩一脚”,(“处女“Blog,X一脚,涉嫌色情)“怎么着也要坚持不懈把这片土灌溉得肥肥沃沃,好让大家踩起来弹力十足(建议去买硅胶灌溉)开开心心~~
    Sept. 16
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    赵老师 wrote:
    木头和endy,标准马屁王,莫要害我的爱徒!!文章写成如此,竟被你们两个小人夸奖。(若是讽刺,另当别论)
    陆陆同志说话大喘气。
    小阿姨又经典了一把。
    Sept. 16
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    culture-link天下文明 wrote:
    再赞!
    Sept. 15
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    天秤座的陆陆 wrote:
    还记得以前大学时候,早上第一二节课当中,到前门马路对面买粢饭吃,好怀念阿
    Sept. 15

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